A song I'm hung up on...

I've had this same song on repeat (only this song) for about two days now. It's "Если хочешь остаться" by Дискотека Авария (see earlier posts for links to download it).

Here's a (very rough) attempt at translating it. Please note, I haven't yet sat down and thoroughly gone through the grammar, so a lot of this is going to be wrong because I don't have objects correct. Also, I need to ask some people (logt, I'll be talking with you) because some of the forms I don't understand what they mean.

( hidden for your sanity )